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[Chance and Ineptitude 1]

I was really impressed with the feel of the whole thing! I mean the speech bubbles could use a bit of sprucing up to match the rest but i really liked the writing and the images and how the music fit in. It would be even better if this was the storyboard for an animation but I really like it!

linda-mota responds:

I agree with oyu on the speech bubbles, but celx (guy who did programing) has a lot on his plate. I think the most important part are the drawings and words. As long as everyone can understand both I'm good. If I was an animator I'd do more, but again that's not my forte. Thank you for the review and watching this.

With love.

[Love lost, love found.]

need to end it

really great, but it restarts and the music gets overlapped and it sounds awful

Mekka23 responds:

Agh you're right. Im new at this. I want the animation to repeat. Kind of the message but i'd like the audio not to :'( I don't know how though

[HappyStep]

well this being your first is irrelevent

everybody always says "this is my first" but really experience doesn't outway talent, and you did good so you did better than most would in their first attempt, so stop saying "this is my first flash" it's obnoxious. i really like it, and the song was good, the only thing that needed changing was the little black kid in the pink clothing. he was on screen for 100% of the animation, and he wasn't even walking, his legs each did half a walk cycle then went back to the beginning then did the half a walk cycle again. change that and you will have a wonderful flash

YouriX responds:

Okay i'll see what i can do about it ;)

But i dont remember ever saying "this is my first flash" :P

[Father's day - Penciw]

yea it was nice

but with the heads as looking so nice, and the bodies looking so bad, it looked like the faces were traced from photographs, and the bodies are a reflection of your true artistic ability, so if you used a smaller, smoother brush for the bodies it would have been alot better, especially considering that most of this was loop after loop, when you cram a flash full of those kinds of loops, the loops need to be mr. clean here! you should have used more layers in the laptop because the bottom edge of the laptop looks like it was there, and then after the finger crossed over it you tried redrawing it how it used to be, but with a bigger brush so it didn't work out, and since like i said, a great portion of this cartoon was the dad in that 2 frame loop of hand up, then hand in a fist with one finger poking the keyboard, you neeed to clean that loop up, it's distracting. and you gotta go to findsounds.com or wherever to find little sound effects for the actions. and maybe when you have sound effects you can show the dad looking at the camera with a raised eyebrow at some point like "what are those kids doing?" and you can do the typical cartoon thing where you hear a bunch of commotion coming from where the kids are, and he stops and looks, but when he looks the noise stops, and as soon as he gets back to work the sound happens again, and this repeats a few times, the dad getting more frustrated everytime, until he goes out to look. and when he is walking out to look, you gotta have his head bounce a bit, it adds some character.
so yea, work on the bodies of the characters
the sound effects
and clean up them sketchy loops
keep it up!

Penciwthekid responds:

Thanks for all the excellent advice, Wam-bo-man!
I'll keep all this great feedback in mind for my next display of questionable talent.

[Roomies! Episode One!]

well there was too many pauses for text

and the toaster had some terrible voice acting, and the lip syncing wasn't very good, i liked the length but you need a better microphone.
and the characters need name introductions, oh and one more thing that you can easily revise would be that when they had first heard the toaster talk, and they're hiding behind the couch, and the redhead "jake" says "i think it did . . . but just to be sure" the transition between well drawn jake, and typical horribly drawn jake, wasn't seemless, it needed work, the way i would have done it would be he says "i think it did" then you do a shot from just behind the toaster, and you see the couch, and his head pokes up all scared. that woulda been nice, oh and also when they're behind the couch, and jake is done talking, the blue haired guy goes to say something to the toaster, and he is all of a sudden on the other side of jake, when originally he was on the viewer's side of jake.
loved the effort tho, aaaan i'm looking forward to the rest of the series!

Jochio responds:

i apreciate your review! and also the things you pointed out!
a few of your points however, were mainly because i rushed that part of the movie :P
I already got the message about the part where they switch sides behind the couch though :P
it was a mistake i made, and i didnt have the time to change that, and i pretty much found it amusing.
Episode Two will be greater than this though, and there acualy is some sort of introduction,
but il make Episodes describing them as a person :P

[Projection]

what i don't get is

how is this your "anniversary" gift. if you've only been together for 123 days? and like 16 weeks er whatever, i mean, an anniversary is 56 weeks, which is 365 days, so this is like a monthaversary present, and all those "..." moments were kind of annoying, and i mean it's great that this is just a gift for one person, and like who are we to judge something you made for someone we don't know, but why would you submit this to the internet? you submit to the internet to show the world, and if you only wanna show one girl, you shoulda just shoved it onna flash drive and took it to her house, or e-mailed it to her

SuperAscendedZAIN responds:

4 month anniversary: Yes, they happen.

The pauses where for dramatic effect, though I'll agree they where a bit... meh.

"but why would you submit this to the internet?" Submit it for its animation technique, and such. I dont just want one person to see something i've made. I want many people to se it, and to critique it. Who its for doesnt matter, what matters is the situation, and the execution.

[Sleepless Ep.1]

you should be proud!

the animation was pretty good! and the style of having the characters have sketchy outlines that was really good looking, but voice acting can make or break an animation and some of yours was pretty weak, same thing with the special effects, like when his eyes were going back and forth, or when he was dissapearing, actions like that have to be spontanious, random, if you have the eyes twitch at 3 different speeds back and forth and loop that, it would look better than just back and forth at the constant speed, (Same goes for the dissapearing) and i totally sound critical but keep in mind i loved this!! but it needed more business! if his eyes quiver like twice and he turns his whole head and they quiver a few more times, and so on, that would look amazing, much better character animation! and when he was dissapearing he like didn't even move! but it was great! so don't take this the wrong way! i just think those are the few little touch ups that would make it even better! but you definitely kept me wanting to know the rest of the story!!

Sci-Fi responds:

hmm i really think your right! i should work more on some of the little visuals. thanks alot

[Timmy + Robot]

alot of people will prolly say this

but it was really good! and waaaay too short!!

KwikToon responds:

suck my balls, timmy

[GUN & SWORD]

great animation

really cool, only thing i would change is their names, get a little bit more creative with 'em. but anyway keep it up!

xarugas03 responds:

yeah uhh i was stuck on that aspect, but i had to finish that scene early sooo yeah xD thanks for teh comments! :)

[a cycle]

this was really good!!!

nice 3D! i have no real advice or anything it looks great to me!

grabbelfant responds:

Thanks man